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    dots Submission Name: A return to formdots
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    Author: Mr_Eff
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 61/62/39
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 82
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1741



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       It's been a long time since I've simply spit. Everything I've been writing has had... "meaning". Sometimes, you just have to spit. A return to form.


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    I've nutured my nature, to grow flows that are organic
    With a god complex, that sort of borders on satanic
    I rock hard like granite, and stretch my rubber band symphony
    One day at a time, and each one will live in infamy
    Instantly gain a reputation for consistancy
    Washing out my brain, after society's conditioned me
    A mature style so pure, your mother dreams of kissing me
    So fucking old school, they teach my rhymes in history
    I'm not Bob Ross, so you won't see me painting happy trees
    Sex nuts, retard strong, fucking all the birds, and the bees
    Spin you 180, leave you concerned about your apathy
    Even though I crack wise, that's no excuse for you to laugh at me
    Even calling me an M.C. is the worst kind of blasphemy
    It's not controlling, or commanding, my shit is microphone mastery
    Hating on my skills, is the highest form of flattery
    And every dish I serve, is peppered with assault and battery
    Once you smell The Odore, the time of your life is over punk
    You surviving this, don't make sense, like a sober drunk
    I twist minds in the fashion of politicians twisting facts
    The way stress can make you want to twist blunts, just to relax
    Let me put this in perspective, my mind's eye is quite perceptive
    Try to remain objective, failing that, I get offensive
    My shit don't stink, it maims your olefactory senses
    The ends justify my means, so to hell with the consequences
    If you aren't sure what common sense is, fortify your defenses
    As I take this confidence shit, past the point where it's pretentious




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 23:42:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THis is a very powerful piece. YOur wording and flow are incredible. I am somewhat dismayed with the curseing, but I think it really fits with this piece. The last line is absolutly fantastic.

    "And every dish I serve, is peppered with assault and battery "

    That really sums up the poem.
    The only critique I have is perhaps seperate the piece into stanzas instead of simple lines. It would make it a little more poingnant.

    Very well done

    your friend
    ben

    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]



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