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    dots Submission Name: Behind you...fearsdots
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    Author: DAlin
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 82/137/75
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsBehind you...fearsdots
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    You make the music feel so good
    When I am down, misunderstood,
    My hate will always run from you
    Smiling at me...I love you too.

    In your hands the sun is happy
    The moon... asleep, not quite so ready,
    Darkness within
    Accept the sin
    A kiss, a thought...a deeper look...

    ...a fight with power and with dreams,
    Behind me, stars...
    Behind you...fears.






    Submitted on 2007-02-28 05:51:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      cool write yo. i love the last stanza.

    peace out
    Da Grim Reaperesssssssss
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      nice write. not really sure what it's about, but it is sweet. good job.
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by AdrienneCale | [ Reply to This ]


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