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love hurts

Author: deathbroken
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love hurts

The day you found that your heart stopped beating,
It was probably my fault.
The day you found your last breath taken,
It was probably my fault.

Happiness is hard to find between the pages of my heart
Tears smudged the carefully placed ink.
Crying, screaming, shouting, all useless to this pain
Nothing can cure this, nothing can help me

Love hurts.
Especially when you place a kiss on her cheek
Love burns
So does my blood when you hold her hand

When I’m gone you will realize
The pain you put me through
When I’m gone you will realize
You were the only one I needed

When I’m gone, you will realize
You needed me too

Submitted on 2007-02-28 07:56:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I agree with you. Love hurts. Love can twist us around and completely faulter our whole entire life, especially when we placed our hearts inside of our lovers/ex-lovers hands. That feeling can never go away, and the lack of trust follows. It hurts dearly...However there is one thing that I completely and utterly disagree that he was the one and only that you needed, you may not want to hear this but its true, and I can't bear to go on without telling you this. No [censored] desearves a person that seems to care more than he, and how I know you care, is because you have this sense of emotion inside of you, I could see the goodness inside of you and the tenderness that has been completely destroyed by examples like him, and you could do better. But if you didn't like reading that I am sorry, I don't mean to stand against your beliefs, I just hate seeing people seeing it their fault that [censored] they don't desearve happens to them. I can't allow it to cross my heart without standing there. Potential is inside of you, bout this write, and I want you to keep jotting down everything your heart tells you. You have your own special way with words that I adore, and I want you to capitalise on that.
| Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is totally awesome!!!!!!!!

| Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by Chafinky | [ Reply to This ]
  hi, I like this write! seen like I've been through the same stuff. I like when you say that love hurts when he kisses her; and love burns, like oyur blood when he holds her hand. So yeah good write good write!!!!

| Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]

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