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    dots Submission Name: The Cycledots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Cycledots

    Oh, no not this again,
    He thinks to himself,
    Should we go to Dr.Phil?
    Get Professional help?
    This is the 3rd or 4th beef,
    They’ve had in the past half week,
    She calls him all night,
    So he barely even sleeps,
    So he get smart,
    And disconnects his phone,
    She calls his cell,
    Emails his work and home,
    Their scrambled sentences,
    Break into twos,
    Hugging and loving into “I Hate You”s
    And then she emails him “Sorry”
    On the next day,
    But the apology still,
    Doesn’t take the pain away,
    Make-up, kiss, kiss,
    It’s all good,
    He would take every word back,
    If he could.
    So then he replies back,
    And all ice cracks,
    It shakes and breaks,
    As they hold ice packs--
    Their heads hurt,
    But worst do their hearts,
    It will kill them,
    To split apart,
    Their broken sentences,
    Merge into ones,
    Hating and berating,
    Has come to none,
    And then the next day,
    Turns a new chapter,
    They meet each other,
    About thirteen after,
    For hugging and loving,
    But before long,
    He disconnects his phone,
    He knows what’s going on…

    Submitted on 2007-02-28 09:43:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey good one ;) it's funny and sad at the same time, right on words :) i like it the way as it goes by a story with the words rhyming, haha, Good work man, Keep it up

    God Bless
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]

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