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    dots Submission Name: THE TRUE LIEdots
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    Author: GoKart Mozart
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 130/93/49
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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    dotsTHE TRUE LIEdots
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    Ladybugs and Jellybeans
    Hoboes and Tramps
    Cockeyed mosquitoes and bowlegged ants

    Now please be quiet
    And close your mouths
    While i tell you this story
    I know nothing about...

    Early in the morning
    In the middle of the night,
    Two dead boys got up to fight;

    One was blind,
    The other couldn't see,
    So they voted the Devil for the referee...

    Back to back they faced each other
    Pulled out a sword and shot each other

    The deaf cop heard the noise-
    Two dead boys

    If you dont believe this lie is true,
    Ask that blind man,
    He saw it, too



    ~~~Unknown




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 09:50:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really amusing. The first few lines didn't catch me at all, but I suspected it couldn't be like that the entire way through. If I were to critique it I'd say make it more gripping for the first stanza, though I guess it isn't necessary. The last lines were the best.

    Loved it.
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol that was very funny, although I have to admitt when I read the first stanza I thought, "Oh no*sigh* not another one of these retarded things." But it turned out not to be one lol, thank gosh! Thanks again for writing it!


    Ash
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ashuri | [ Reply to This ]



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