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    dots Submission Name: Regenerationdots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This poem is about things I saw and sensed as I watched a child from infant to adult.
    It is rhymed because all things we do are repetitions until otherwise learned through trial and error.


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    dotsRegenerationdots
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    I once looked upon a child
    and found a message there all the while
    as to how life has its style
    of wondering how to go the next mile.

    I found within the child's creep and crawl
    how to install or uninstall
    a smile, a frown or how to bawl
    to break through the mind's firewall.

    I further sensed a child's need to explore
    all jungles,all seas and their shores
    but what I missed was need to abhor
    what the mind had not in its store.

    Then as the months did pass,
    I saw the lessons learned would last
    a lifetime to hold and grasp
    at things that would come to pass.

    I saw the clone two cells had made
    reach out to find its own "sun and shade",
    then I found that life has its own cutting blade
    to mold a human of finest grade.

    To these lessons we are all held and bound
    to break the chains of prohibition found
    lest there be in life eroded ground
    that feet of robots love to pound and pound.




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 10:32:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi,

    How true, this is the way we learn, to do something over and over again, and strange how we still learn even when we are older, through observation and evaluation.
    Liked this part:
    "saw the clone two cells had made
    reach out to find its own "sun and shade",

    Kind regards
    Eric
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ]


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