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    dots Submission Name: Haikusdots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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    Description:
       In Macon Georgia, each year they have what is called "The Cherry Blossom Festivel". It is all about these stupid pink blossoms on the cherry trees. For a week everything is pink. Ladies hats and dresses, men's shirts, cars, businesses, beer, etc. anyway the local paper runs a Haiku contes each year for Haikus relating to the cherry blossom, below are two I submitted. Cleao also submitted two, hers are better than mine. Check hers out too. cleocollier
    Well she hasn't posted them yet, but check in soon she will have them up


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    Still awed by thousands
    My pink delicate beauty
    Yet modest and plain



    A crescendo of growth
    Inspiring in rebirth
    Peacefulness abounds




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 10:34:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy Friday!!!

    I remember going to that festival when I lived in GA!

    The trees here are abud too - love Spring!

    I liked the 2nd haiku, bless you, the best!

    Hope all is well with you and your family!
    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty in pink. well, maybe not everyone! I gave up pink years ago. moved to crimson. not exactly red, not exactly pink. deeper. aged. like wine!

    I like these haikus. nice job.
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      According to the count of syllables, first one is a perfect haiku ( 5/7/5.... need I say that ! ) It also embodies the spirit of the festival.

    But this is the second one that deserves the prize for capturing the timeless theme of continuity which makes these celebrations relevant.

    Enjoy the shades of pink :)
    -parul.
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]


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