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    dots Submission Name: a fair price for such a nasty falldots
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    Author: PoeticNonsense
    ASL Info:    17/F/spinning out
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 205/206/83
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsa fair price for such a nasty falldots
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    It's on the rocks and
    finally hitting home. You
    can't lose something you
    never had, something

    you never even wanted.
    Shaken, not disturbed:
    that's how i take my
    tonic now, after that

    horrid "accident" as
    the well-wishers and
    passers-by tend to say.
    But you know better,

    don't you? Coming up
    for air but finding only
    poison in its stead.
    Not an apple, no,

    not an orange, and most
    certainly not a pear. The
    peach falls off the back
    of the cart, battered and

    bruised. Come along
    and dust it off, mind
    the defects the doctor
    left, and take a bite.




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 11:04:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am starting to believe that love has left you bitter and quite jaded. I can only hope that these bruises you've experienced haven't taken you completely out of the game of life. Love can also be good when it's right...when it's right!
    | Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has a confusing undertone to me.
    I don't quite understand the messenge.
    It is a very vivid in the imaging. That I like.
    The flow was original but choppy... It
    was very intresting to read...


    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
       Hey there,


    I really like this one. I understand it and can relate to it. I love your poetry. It is so descriptive. I understand to a point of a pencile. I know I couldn't think of anything. So keep on writing. This is very good.

    Kelsey
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      There's an under-tone here very powerful but i can't tell what it personally means to you. It moves you to make strong phrases. The ending is wonderful but the description in the beginning is a wonderful gateway to the middle stanzas. I really enjoyed the piece but it being a personal poem but expresses that even bruised things can be eaten.


    Semper Fidelis,
    Christopher
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]


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