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    dots Submission Name: Your Platinum Gamedots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 593/819/331
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 141
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       To my deranged ex, didn't apprechiate enough what I had to give her...Don't give a shit anymore, she'se got mental problems, and I can't bear it anymore...Loves gone from her.


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    dotsYour Platinum Gamedots
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    If you can love me,
    How can orgasim over the pain you give?
    Your promises, your wishes, your grievances, your misery.
    All your lies and your plots are only something you always lived.

    Keeping my hands tied to your games,
    Spoiling me with your lust and your self-pity.
    Your dirty games and your untold shame,
    Are all the tools you used to once control me.

    So I ask does it hurt,
    To no longer be your puppet tied to your strings?
    Nothing ever meant anything, even when you treated me like dirt,
    And then finally lose control of everything?

    You know you can't escape the things that make you so tragic,
    Apprechiation was nothing to you in my eyes.
    Never noticing my rekindled rage, my hate, and what made me sick,
    All I felt like was a pawn in your mental demise.

    It's not that fun now to be the one who slits her wrist, is it?
    To feel the misery placed back onto you.
    How does it feel to be treated like shit?
    Now I'm winning your favorite game, in cold hearted virtue.

    It was too difficult to pretend, and more to not even exsit to you,
    To live under that false name that made me so derranged.
    Looking at the past, through all the shit you placed me through.
    I laugh now, because it's you who lost her own game...




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 11:06:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love how you categorized this as "Poetry/Love", is that a parting shot or what? The "ex" is always a [censored], but for myself I kind of knew that going in so there's really no one to blame but myself.

    Unfortunately we can't change your own history and it's sometimes hard to divide the bitter from the sweet. It's harder still to reflect upon what might have otherwise been.

    These words of yours fit my "ex" situation just fine:

    "You know you can't escape the things that make you so tragic," - wow, such universal truth and the untimate put-down at the same time!
    and,
    "All I felt like was a pawn in your mental demise." - Yeah, she had reason to use me, and maybe enough mercy or just plain guilt to cut me loose soon afterwards. But most likely I'm still trying to give that totally self-absorbed "Platinum" kookie too much credit.

    Thanks for bringing it home.

    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I love this cos I can completely relate to the game playing, I cannot understand how humans can do this to one another.

    You know you can't escape the things that make you so tragic,
    Apprechiation was nothing to you in my eyes.
    Never noticing my rekindled rage, my hate, and what made me sick,
    All I felt like was a pawn in your mental demise.

    This one is definately my fave part.

    Well Done

    Tink
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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