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    dots Submission Name: The Misfit Queen of Heartsdots
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    Author: only_a_dreamX
    ASL Info:    18/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 81/69/52
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 277
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 805



    Description:
       this piece is for someone who is more important to me than anyone in the world...it may be up for editing eventually but comment freely nonetheless.


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    dotsThe Misfit Queen of Heartsdots
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    When I’m seeking the king,
    He shows me who I need to be,
    Takes my hand and strengthens me,
    Walks me through the hopeless dark;
    His love has set me free.

    When I’ve found the king,
    He wipes away these blinding tears,
    Comforts me and brings me peace,
    Replacing all my loneliness;
    He scatters all my fears.

    When I’m held by the king,
    He purifies my well worn heart,
    Giving me a brand new start,
    There’s no one here but him and me
    And a mask that’s fallen apart.

    When I’m loved by the king,
    It’s nothing like I’ve felt before,
    He just keeps filling me more and more,
    I’ll give my all with no backward glance;
    He’s shaken me straight to the core.




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 15:13:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wonderfully concieved and thought through and executed so well ... excellent, excellent meter with some superb scansion ... and all round terrific poem ... you have a talent here, no question ... nurture it! bravo ... bravo ... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm. This was very well written... however, I would like to see more of a pattern for each stanza, like where the rhyming words are placed at the end of the sentences... but that's probably because I love organization and patterns... anyhow, overall, I loved it becuase I know exactly how you feel!

    Keep writing and keep up the great work!

    *~ Mist ~*
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]



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