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    dots Submission Name: i cannotdots

    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsi cannotdots

    how will i move on from this
    how will i feel the mornings bliss
    you gave me all that i am and all i will be
    i cannot imagine thinking of you as my memory

    how will i love anyone, as i have loved you
    how will i see the sky as such a radiant blue
    you gave my world color, you lightened my dark sky
    i cannot allow you to grow weak, suffer and die

    how will i live through each upcoming day
    how will i feel the warmth of the summers rays
    you gave me freedom, you gave me a voice
    i cannot let go of you, this is my final choice

    Submitted on 2007-02-28 18:23:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it, but i think you should make the second stanza the last.
    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      hm... Really good write... I feel like this today... I jus won't admit it to anyone else in this world... Hope life's good for you.. The poetry's been really good latley...
    love ya
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]

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