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    dots Submission Name: summers fragrant fleshdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotssummers fragrant fleshdots
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    deep in the solid, formless night
    unkempt and rolled in solemn cloth
    i am still, unmoving in the dusty air
    a statue in your stoic fog

    i have come here again
    reposed a sacred mountain of air
    seamless and dreaming moments dawning
    like children stowed inside the trees

    i know no other hands as these
    feathers born of fearless nights
    and star-filled eyes of endless depth
    curled round this milky moonlit world

    amongst the peeling flowers
    behind the groves of painful sidewalks
    over the hapless lawns of skin
    is a sanctuary of treasured lips

    pressure for the gentle heartbeats we accrue
    and dowsed in summers fragrant flesh
    i'm all crushed in heavy sighs
    and your mouth of folding fire

    i have come here to know you
    and show you all of loves technologies
    like a stone, or a river or an island storm
    mirrored movements of our aching hearts released




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 20:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "amongst the peeling flowers
    behind the groves of painful sidewalks
    over the hapless lawns of skin
    is a sanctuary of treasured lips"


    it's so wonderful. i am in aw

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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