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Pavlovian Love


Author: JAcksonJr
ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 56 /116 /57
Words: 146
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Pavlovian Love



A conditioning
Through didactic speech
Learning to never leave your side
My love, I gladly abide

Unable to
Contemplate departure,
Your experiment is far from done
Division leaves me a solitary one

Throw me a treat
When I become sad
With pen and paper
Write a list of observed behavior

I know in my heart
It will never end
I’m the one you’ve began to tame
Saying ‘Pavlov’s a cut nickname’

Pleading for your return
‘what a peculiar thing’
You start to write
‘well isn’t that a pathetic sight’

Smiling because
The experiment is better
Than you could ever anticipate
As I become torn between love and hate

And every time you ask
With a hint of a smile
‘how are you doing? I ask because I care’
I know my answer is filling up your questionnaire




Submitted on 2007-02-28 23:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  very well written... the concept is ingenious and the words are exquisite! imagery makes you seem doglike refering to pavlov's dog... what exact kind of love was portrayed here though??
ali
| Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, this was just exquisite.
I saw the title and immediately thought, "Pavlov's dogs!" and wondered what that could possibly have to do with love.

But you wove love right into it. It was a very creative concept, and it fits just perfectly. The insatiable pull of being in love with someone; a dogs need for food. Someone being in control of your emotions; someone being in control of your food supply.

I quite enjoyed this.
| Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]


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