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    dots Submission Name: Pavlovian Lovedots
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    Author: JAcksonJr
    ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 56/116/57
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsPavlovian Lovedots
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    A conditioning
    Through didactic speech
    Learning to never leave your side
    My love, I gladly abide

    Unable to
    Contemplate departure,
    Your experiment is far from done
    Division leaves me a solitary one

    Throw me a treat
    When I become sad
    With pen and paper
    Write a list of observed behavior

    I know in my heart
    It will never end
    I’m the one you’ve began to tame
    Saying ‘Pavlov’s a cut nickname’

    Pleading for your return
    ‘what a peculiar thing’
    You start to write
    ‘well isn’t that a pathetic sight’

    Smiling because
    The experiment is better
    Than you could ever anticipate
    As I become torn between love and hate

    And every time you ask
    With a hint of a smile
    ‘how are you doing? I ask because I care’
    I know my answer is filling up your questionnaire




    Submitted on 2007-02-28 23:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very well written... the concept is ingenious and the words are exquisite! imagery makes you seem doglike refering to pavlov's dog... what exact kind of love was portrayed here though??
    ali
    | Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this was just exquisite.
    I saw the title and immediately thought, "Pavlov's dogs!" and wondered what that could possibly have to do with love.

    But you wove love right into it. It was a very creative concept, and it fits just perfectly. The insatiable pull of being in love with someone; a dogs need for food. Someone being in control of your emotions; someone being in control of your food supply.

    I quite enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]


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