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    dots Submission Name: SWEET SIXTEEN AT HEARTdots
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    Author: Bones
    ASL Info:    40/M/ALABAMA
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 11/10/18
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 648
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    Bytes: 1303



    Description:
       THIS WAS THE FIRST POEM I WROTE, IT WAS ABOUT A GOOD FRIEND OF MINE, THAT I CARED FOR VERY MUCH AND STILL DO; THE LAST TIME I SAW HER, HER HAD SAID THE SHE HAD CANCER; FORE YEARS I THOUGHT THIS WAS TRUE, ABOUT A MONTH AGO I HAD FOUND OUT THAT HER MOM LIED TO ME; MY WORST FEARS WAS THAT SHE HAD DIED FROM THE CANCER, I FOUND OUT SHE IS DOING GOOD AND HAS A SON THAT IS 16 NOW; THE BAD THING IS SHE DON`T REMEMBER ME, LIFE GOES ON AND WE MUST DO THE SAME; WE MUST LIVE FOR TODAY NOT THE PAST, I AM GLADE I KNOW SHE IS ALIVE AND NEVER HAD CANCER; I PRAY TO GOD SHE NEVER GETS IT, SHE WAS A BEAUTIFUL TEEN AND SHE IS JUST AS BEAUTIFUL TODAY; I STILL HOLD HER IN MY HEART & ALWAYS WILL. YOUR FRIEND: BONES


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    SWEET SIXTEEN AT HEART
    Current mood: flirty
    Category: sore Writing and Poetry


    I KNOW A GIRL WHO`S IN HER TEENS,

    SHE`S AS BEAUTIFUL AS A QUEEN;

    SHE LAUGHS AT WHAT SHE DOESN`T UNDERSTAND,

    FOR SHE`S JUST A CHILD IN THIS LOST LAND;

    YES SHE`S JUST A CHILD,

    BUT NOT YET DEFILED;

    HER SMILE BRINGS PEACE TO MY HEART,

    A PEACE THAT NO ONE CAN TEAR APART;

    SHE HAS A SPARKLE IN HER EYES,

    THAT CAN LIGHT UP THE STARS IN THE SKY;

    SHE HAS THE VOICE OF AN ANGLE,

    HER VOICE CAN PUT MY WORLD IN A TANGLE;

    WHEN I THINK OF HER I GET LOST IN TIME,

    MOST PEOPLE WOULD SAY THAT THIS IS A CRIME;

    SHE IS ONE THAT I WOULD DIE FOR IN A MINUTE,

    I PRAY THAT SHE KNOS JUST HOW MUCH I MEAN IT;

    SHE HAS A SPECIAL PLACE IN MY HEART,

    I THINK SHE CAN TELL BY THE WORDS IN MY HEART;

    I GIVE ALL THE THANK TO THE LORD,

    FOR HE GAVE ME THE WORD;

    IF HE HAD NOT PUT THE WORDS IN MY HEART,

    I WOULD NOT HAVE KNOWN WHERE TO START.



    WRITTEN BY: WILLIAM D THOMPSON JR




    Submitted on 2007-03-01 02:05:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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