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    dots Submission Name: Not Even Youdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsNot Even Youdots
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    While sin slowly sooths me,
    Puts me soft to sleep,
    I wish for when,
    I will awake keep,
    The person I am inside,
    Wills for what's right,
    But I find in my mind,
    I always loose the fight,
    Loose my strength,
    Of what used to be strong,
    Because in life things
    Feel so long,
    Or wrong when,
    I stumble on my way,
    To the distance in the dark,
    I would dare stay,
    I wish I could,
    Express how it feels,
    But if I told you,
    You wouldn't take me for real,
    I'm afraid for my life,
    And I know the truth,
    But no one accepts it,
    Not Even You




    Submitted on 2007-03-01 09:52:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it, except for one thing. a few parts dont really flow. e.x: i will awake keep. Did you mean to say keep awake? or was it supposed to be the other way?? regaurdless its really good :D
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by bassnguitar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      it must be hard not being understood. it gets worse when acceptance is so hard to find. i feel for you. but theres always a silver lining behind every cloud :) all the best to you!
    keep up the good work

    tina
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by tina_mik | [ Reply to This ]


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