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    dots Submission Name: Father Medots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 428
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsFather Medots
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    Watch over me as a child,
    Shield me from the wind,
    I wish you'd father me,
    But you watch me spin,
    I don't hate nor like you,
    Just torn between the two,
    I know the way you think,
    You think my need are few,
    You're not dead beat,
    But I am you know,
    I'm frustrated with life,
    I need the guide to grow,
    So I bleed and I need,
    Asking do you rememeber me?
    I'm your kin, but it's,
    Like you deny forcibly,
    With me, it's deep in the cut,
    Salt in the wound,
    I'm a rose without petals,
    That will not bloom,
    And I, I soon fear,
    For the day




    Submitted on 2007-03-01 10:07:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      mmm... that's really sad! :( it's makes one think though... I really liked it! well phrased, great words... Good Job!
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      very sad, very dark. intreasting topic. nice job though! the only suggestion i have is to break it up into stanzas. it makes it easier to read. overall very nice!
    Write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]


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