Betrayal, its so painful to go through... I've known my own betrayals and pains, but they are what made me strong today. Strong enough to forgive and live. We, as humans, are capable of so much destruction... But there is also a potential for good in all of us. I feel positive about the future. Life will find a way.
well...this one sure does hold potential of a good poem...need a lot of work and tweaking though...i really like the flow of emotion through out...but sure needs better choice of words...more powerful ones...if you know what i mean?
i have this thing for typos...they get highlighted italicized and bold in front of my eyes when i read 'em...lots of typos through out the poem...
its ~thier~ greed that ~bringss~ this pain
but our ~lonliiness~ teaches us
our wisdom helps decide if ~thier~ the one
and to ~garantee~ this
i hope you dont take this hard...you have immense potential...just needs fine tuning...