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waiting for a hero

Author: darkwiccan14
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booreddd...and plus my little bro is watching hercules xD lmao!

waiting for a hero

There's a dark hidden beast,
Living among us,
Terorizing us until it's ready to feast,
To rid of it we must,
Until this creature will become ill with disease.

Living among us,
The beast has a power,
A power so great,
We began to lose trust,
This fear soon started to tower,
We let this happend to us,
sitting here as the beasts bait.

Out of light,
Out of hope,
Out of fear,
Sitting and waiting,
So some type of hero to appear....

Submitted on 2007-03-01 17:57:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  u r describing my sister lol just kidding
| Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
  rather confusing! youre title is perfect and i expected it to be about something totally diff! Im interested to know how you interpret this poem..?
| Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by michaela | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm intreasting. one could interpret this poem in many ways. good job rhyming!
Write on,
| Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]

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