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    dots Submission Name: The Perspective of Deceptiondots
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    Author: JAcksonJr
    ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 56/116/57
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 201
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 648



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    dotsThe Perspective of Deceptiondots
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    Our love lasted
    Just about as long as the spark
    We were broken
    Falling to pieces from the start

    Your intentions
    Of having ever lasting love
    Were laughable
    But I played your game for some time

    Penetrating
    You enter the room with great ease
    Unlike my heart
    Who’s chambers you will never see

    You come closer
    But I give you a halting glare
    As you stop dead
    I bring my hand close to my eyes

    Declaring that
    From this perspective I have you
    Right where I want
    Sitting in the palm of my hand




    Submitted on 2007-03-01 23:58:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      superb....i am speechless

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      This was clever! Absolutely fantastic! I would only suggest considering the possiblity of having 2-line stanzas... but I do like the idea of 4-line stanzas when it comes to this particular piece of work... Great job, though! *applauds*

    Keep writing and keep up the excellent work!

    *~ Mist ~*
    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]



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