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Author:	Skillessbasterd
ASL Info:	19/withdiseasedstrangers/
Elite Ratio:	4.57 - 486/663/201
Words:	207

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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for those of you who know what this means, this is a "timmy" write. it's from chapter 21.

The Angels Moonlight Eyes dots

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I have seen the growing fortress.
I have touched the angels moonlight eyes
and for a seconds stare in heaven
I received an understanding of the compromise.

My love we live in eternity
forever distant from the sun.
We soar the sky with paper wings
burning till our hearts go numb,
but in this blank staring,
greeting waves upon the shore,
we build castles of our un-caring
to live under a thought assured.
But with no love to bring you closer
nor a fear to teach you of warmth,
God is spinning in perfect discomposure
for we leave smoke clouds as we soar.

So open your eyes and let the light consume
sacrifice the easy light for it sacrifices you.

Until the day we find the way we play in dirt and forfeit games.
We never knew we never tried we never meant this honest lie.

I have seen the pupil of understanding
been shown the angels bleeding scars.
For a longer look in heaven
we must first realize our hearts.

Look above
for
Death is rebirth.

Look my love.
For
Heaven is earth.

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well, i know i haven't read all the chapters about timmy, but i did read a few..from where i left off, this seems out of the blue...maybe i missed a few in between.. i would have never put two together had you not descripted it

however, i really like this, though it reminds me nothing of timmy. i do vaguely remember the thought of a glimmer of hopefulness though the last time we talked about him. i dunno, maybe i need to go back through your stuff and get a refresher course.

in any case, i love this bit of softer kinder side of you/timmy.
| Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
two days ago i was kinda out of it with my meds increase and im sure some part of it i was plonked in the middle of a timmy write... the one right at the beginning with the old beat up car... i think i was the steering wheel... you think im a freak anyways yeah... timmy writes...

this doesnt have the anger that i associate with the timmy writes... perhaps ive missed him getting out of jail and calming down some...
this almost seems... resigned to me...

i remember the way he started off so beautiful and loving and then the way the world or circumstace hardened him but i never got to this part... to where he seems to have mellowed out but i like it... i like it a whole lot.

it reminds me a whole lot of icarus
this is gonna sound crazy but if i were to respond to this piece as timmys girl i would wanna reply with my favourite icarus poem (though i dont remember who wrote it)

He said he would be back and we'd drink wine together
He said that everything would be better than before
He said we were on the edge of a new relation
He said he would never again cringe before his father
He said that he was going to invent full-time
He said he loved me that going into me
He said was going into the world and the sky
He said all the buckles were very firm
He said the wax was the best wax
He said Wait for me here on the beach
He said Just don't cry

I remember the gulls and the waves
I remember the islands going dark on the sea
I remember the girls laughing
I remember they said he only wanted to get away from me
I remember mother saying: Inventors are like poets, a trashy lot
I remember she told me those who try out inventions are worse
I remember she added: Women who love such are the worst of all
I have been waiting all day, or perhaps longer.
I would have liked to try those wings myself.
It would have been better than this.

random i know but thats my reply... if i were asked for one...

this line slays me:
We never knew we never tried we never meant this honest lie.

did you really write 21 chapters? i never got that far i dont think... did you post them all...?
| Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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