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    dots Submission Name: Dear, Love dots
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    Author: WonderfulComa
    ASL Info:    18MAl
    Elite Ratio:    5.66 - 75/59/29
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 859
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 512



    Description:
       This is a letter to love itself.


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    dotsDear, Love dots
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    Dear, The not so enduring, Love

    You dear Love are abstract, wrapped in lies.
    The more it pains the more it cries.
    You are an exaggerated expression of feeling.
    Taking live, leaving no pity for the willing.
    Love why won't you speak to me.
    The love i know doesn't swim with the sea .
    Love, i would have to say your not so great.
    Love i ask you to go away.
    Sincerely , The one who knows that you are a lie.




    Submitted on 2007-03-02 12:21:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey,
    I liked this poem!
    It's so sad, but I guess that's how it goes.
    You need to keep up the good work, because you're really talented.
    You need to help me get better!
    -AnGeL
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bradley, I like thiss poem of yours! I like how you did it a letter form. I also like the line, "you dear loveare abstact, wrapped in lies." I agree with Martin, ya are talented!

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very interesting take on love. Not quite so different than my take on it. Love, usually in the end cause pain. Everyone has their heart broken once in a lifetime....Except for Mrs. German, but she's probably some kind of demon or some such.

    Anyhow, this seems to be pretty unique, I don't see many people writing poems in a semi-letter form. Very good indeed.

    "You dear Love are abstract, wrapped in lies."
    This line struck me, I don't know why it just did. It holds a lot of truth, but surely some love must be true. If not, I don't see how people can live a life of Hell with someone they don't even want to be with. But oh well, what do I know.

    Good write, and keep writing man. You're talented.

    Sincerely,
    Martin
    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]


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