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    dots Submission Name: In Fields Of Ryedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    dotsIn Fields Of Ryedots
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    Ripe fields of rye in this green land
    Have set me dreaming dreams of yore,
    Of castles and a paramour
    Who has the dizzy ages spanned.

    There is a fragrance in the air,
    I see my limber chatelaine,
    She’s walking swiftly while her train
    Offsets her lovely scarlet hair.

    With smiles I watch her deft hand fling
    A crown of roses to the rye,
    She breathes so deeply and her sigh
    Is like a small rill murmuring.

    Her arms upon her chest have crossed,
    A silent prayer comes from her lips,
    A chain of silver on her hips…
    And then it is the vision’s lost!

    Ripe fields of rye in this green land
    Have set me dreaming dreams of yore,
    Of castles and a paramour
    Who has the dizzy ages spanned.




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      Graceful. I always thought of your poems as graceful. It's not only motion that can be graceful but words also. Very lithe, enchanting. Dancing images in a sweet embrace and a majestic harmony for the most delicate ears.
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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