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    dots Submission Name: Mindfuck.2dots
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    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 20/52/35
    Words: 519
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 227
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 3157



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    dotsMindfuck.2dots
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    Then your mind wanders a little further.

    You sit there and catch yourself thinking about dogs fucking. But you don't stop it, you let your mind play around for a bit. You think about different kinds of dogs fucking. Greyhounds, rottweilers, terriers.

    This is a good thing to think about, you think.

    Then your mind wanders a little further.

    You think about dogs fucking people.

    Do they enjoy it? The dogs?

    Is sex a pleasure thing for them, or are they just doing it because their uncontrollable instincts kick in?

    Does a dog have a mind?

    No one can get me in here, you think.

    (You think what I say.)

    (You think what I say.)

    (I am telling you what to think.)

    But can they? How old are you? Are you old enough to stop believing that your parents know what is in your mind? Have you passed that threshold?

    I'm safe from my parents in here, you think.

    A green car with large, shining rims rolls by.

    I am inside you.

    I control your thoughts. Didn't you see that?

    There was a man standing in the kitchen in his boxers, holding a coffee pot. It was late. He couldn't sleep. Not yet. He still had to masturbate first.

    He dropped his coffee pot, and it shattered.

    Shit.

    The man stood, looking on the ground at the slivers of glass littering his kitchen floor. The lights were off.

    His mind wandered a little farther.

    His sister was asleep.

    He bent down and picked up a piece of glass. It has a nice curve to it, he thinks.

    (It has a nice curve to it, you think.)

    He went into the room where his sister lived, and walked up beside her couch. She slept on her couch. This is great, he thinks.

    (What next, you think.)

    The man stood for a while, listening to his sisters quiet snores as she slept peacefully, unaware of the situation at hand. Or maybe she was. Maybe she was dreaming it. Probably not, she's pure. She isn't a sick fuck like you.

    His penis was rigid by now. He had toyed around with this plan for a while now (in his mind in his mind not mine, you think.) He lowered his boxers, his penis springing out as soon as it could. It couldn't wait to be free. It wanted this.

    Does a penis have a mind?

    (A small one, you think.)

    He lowered the sliver of glass down to his penis. He shook with excitement. There was no waiting, he was to excited. He sliced, letting the blood drip down onto his sister. Again. Again.

    Orgasm.

    His sister never woke up.

    The man left the room and went to sleep.

    Now what are you thinking about?

    (I control your thoughts. Me, motherfucker.)

    You can't protect yourself from me.

    (I control you.)

    Leave, its over.




    Submitted on 2007-03-02 13:46:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This was awesomly done, the mind control [censored]. It scared me a little cause it's true the way that works with your mind. Kinda makes me wonder bout you, but I still really dig the piece.

    Maddie
    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by Madelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm.. this one got a little obsesive. kinda disturbing. the concepts and seperating your thoughts from what you think others are thinking, and linking those ideas togeather in the realization that every deranged thought you believe someone else is thinking is really just your own placed in proxy. nice.
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved it...absolutely loved it..Couldn't stop reading. Maybe because I have a sick mind. I left this site for over seven months, and I come to reading [censored] like this. Amazing. *is insane, but aren't we all*
    I have nothing to say on how to make it better, its great as is. Its just..great. *could be a little excited by this* lmfao, sorry.

    Yours truly,
    Lucy ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      I have several thoughts on this. Hopefully any 'excitement' that you have put away is dealt with now...and if not, deal with it. It isn't healthy to dwell on things like this.

    I remember when I was staying the summer with you (when you and daivd were hanging out) and I use to sincerely be afraid of you, that maybe one day you would snap from your brilliance, from your corruption and kill me or Jessie. I dreamt that you came into Jess's room while we slept and I saw a silhouette of you standing in thedoorway holding a machete...then on Christmas the next day Raivn and Tony got you one. I think this is a VERY strong piece. What a mind [censored]...how would you ever feel if this were you. Let's explore that thought. Or maybe you are applying all aspects of your mind to create a very contemporary write. This, seems to me, very honest. It explores the human nature, echoes Frued...I'm leaving further comment in your PM.
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      riveting....thats just all i have to say.....riveting

    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this is disturbing.

    That's all I can say. It's very realistic and highly disturbing. And EXTREMELY vivid.

    And I couldn't tear my eyes away from it...it was like the scene of a terrible and gory accident.
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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