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    dots Submission Name: Love Grows on a Barren Fielddots
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    Author: JAcksonJr
    ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 56/116/57
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove Grows on a Barren Fielddots
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    Mountains can be moved with love
    Is what you said
    Fragile as thread
    Soft as feathers of a dove

    Mountains maybe, but not me
    Maybe I am
    The bare field then
    There are no mountains to see

    I still wait in the bare field
    Where your mountain
    Of love fountained
    To anotherís call you yield

    As I wait for your return
    A girl stumbles
    Upon brambles
    But beauty she did discern

    Behold a sight to abhor
    This barren land
    Working her hand
    Flowers grew forever more

    With life brought to each petal
    A stunning view
    Of a love true
    In beauty we will settle

    No mountain was moved for me
    Never had to
    With time love grew
    And blossomed unceasingly




    Submitted on 2007-03-02 16:58:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I reallyllike this one!! It describes me and my relationship with my guy perfectly. When I wanted a boyfriend, the guys ran the other way, but through friendship and time, love blossomed. Very nicely put!

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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