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    dots Submission Name: Whendots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 335/126/47
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 146
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    dotsWhendots
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    When-
    You caress my body,
    the tips of your fingers-
    the palm of your hand...
    I feel we are invincible.
    The rest of the world,
    does not matter-
    As long as I feel,
    You next to me.

    When-
    Your hand lingers...
    on my thigh,
    Anticipation building.
    You smoothly pull me-
    Under you spell.
    As your fingers glide-
    up under my shirt,
    Crossing my tender waist-
    I shiver,
    As you start,
    Circling-
    my breasts.
    Taking your time,
    Feeling each one tense,
    to your touch-
    as I surrender...




    Submitted on 2007-03-02 19:13:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oooooh...sexy.

    I can seriously appreciate a good erotic piece. I love erotica. It shows that there are other people out there that have your same desires, that can get lost in a moment just like you can. This is good...not too graphic, but not too tame either. I like it.
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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