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Submission Name: Bleeding dots

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Author:	Torie
Elite Ratio:	2.69 - 176/194/40
Words:	36

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	101
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	264

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Bleeding dots

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I can't do it.

I don't want to bleed.

Not another breath!

Remain completely still.

See

You are safe
you are not bleeding or breathing.

Let me look after you.

Submitted on 2007-03-02 22:52:17 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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...hmm
well holding your breath might save you the blood but definately not the brain cells.

interesting.
| Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]

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