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    dots Submission Name: To Latedots
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    Author: Afireinside2187
    ASL Info:    18/m/IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 13/24/15
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsTo Latedots
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    You can't save me.

    I've fallen to far from home.

    Sincere words led me away.

    But jealous emotions made me stay.

    The unwelcome night holds close.

    Naturally, I'm to shallow to return.

    Overwhelming thoughts grab tight to the soul.

    I'm still unable to leave.

    You can't save me.

    I've fallen to far from myself




    Submitted on 2007-03-03 00:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Don't take this the wrong way,
    but your feeding yourself an excuse; an excuse to not try,
    I don't think your shallow i think your contempt,
    I know its a hard road to follow back, but hey one step at a time is all it entails, if you can sense the truth grant yourself the choice,
    it's something you owe yourself, there's know rush, sow the seeds and you could wait for years and then all a sudden you could become flooded in five minutes.
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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