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    Author: Afireinside2187
    ASL Info:    18/m/IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 13/24/15
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 540
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 623



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    Vibrations break through silence, shaking nerves fiercely.

    Tension inside is to much to hold closly.

    Gentle air softly brushes over smalls strands of hair.

    Emotions are in check, yet to strong to contain.

    Moisture forms, causing bliss between conception.

    Skin grazes, revealing a dull wet gloss.

    Careless whispers quickly fill the dead of night.

    Warm heartbeats erupt with a willful force.

    Time stands still, but life easily rushes past.

    Though the night is over, this will last forever.




    Submitted on 2007-03-03 00:48:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ok i think that you have the right idea when you wrote this but i think that you could have done a little better on this write you have the skills so don't be afraid to let your emotions run free
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah coupling..aka...sex, it can be magical.
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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