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    dots Submission Name: Reciprocitydots

    Author: drowning_queen
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 245/270/52
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    I will dance on his body
    until he ignites in me
    the strength to leave him
    until his onyx snake
    rises in my womb,
    blossoming like lotus petals;
    filling and emptying
    my lights all at once

    I will lend him my opal serpent
    to coil at his broad base
    steadying him as he
    shares his sheltered fire,
    cobalt flames surrounding us,
    Kundalini nestled motionless
    in the dark, rooted depths of
    his iron-red Muladhara

    Submitted on 2007-03-03 09:20:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oooo Hinduism. It's funny, I am actually stufying that now in my spare time, and reading the BhaghavadGita, which is very interesting. I love how you have love making as something that should be reciprocated, and it should be, otherwise, it isn't love making, it's baby making. Hehehe. This was a really descriptive one, and I love the use of the word Kundalini, to describe the serpent-like energy that coils when she dances on top of him. For a second I saw someone playing the flute to a cobra while it danced, and I guess that could be the same thing. I like this poem, it's very sexual, and raw, which is exactly how it should be. The picture, I love how they are colorless, until Kundalini rises, giving them color as he coils and slithers through each chakra point. Bliss. Amazing job.
    Shine brightly,
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm...."legend"....that's an interesting take.

    And this is a very different write for you. Short, sweet, and full of concrete imagery. I get the feeling that its about some myth i'm not familiar with. It also gets me thinking that its sexual....and destructive.

    Sexual destruction?

    Every time someone talks about their womb it just makes me want to crawl inside it. Maybe have a nice warm nap.

    terminably insane,
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]

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