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    dots Submission Name: Semi Detatcheddots
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    Author: SilverScent
    ASL Info:    19/Female/England
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 94/106/71
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 71
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1610



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    My tongue swam in a pool of saliva
    as I noticed the tea bag advert.
    If only I could grab the mug from the image
    and enjoy it on my way to work.

    The billboard was fixed to the side of
    a semi detached house.
    It did nothing in promoting the homeliness
    of the property.
    Yet neither did the paint job.

    Baring the shabby, natural look,
    the naked brown, grey and red bricks were stacked
    in shoddy inconsistent patterns.
    The off-white chipped paint, in accordance
    presumed what is underneath counts more,
    and rotting wood began to rear it’s ugly head.
    Left of centre, propped a narrow musty door
    marked with thick, black ink; number nine.

    The low maintenance owners hadn’t grasped
    the importance of a well presented abode.
    Unlike number eleven; the neighbours.
    A ruled line centre of the properties
    guided my eyes to the right, and to the
    sunny disposition of next door.

    The vibrant, yellow walls,
    with paint in every crevasse were
    the most visible on the street.
    Not a smudge made its way onto the
    fresh white window panes and door.
    Amidst the citrus sheet
    a pink synthetic butterfly hung,
    and below, an empty basket waited
    for spring to arrive….

    Comparing the exteriors, was inevitable,
    and I was pondering upon the residents‘ persona
    when I heard the horns
    of impatient commuters behind me;
    I was late for work.




    Submitted on 2007-03-03 13:04:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really good, obviously it wasn't full of emotion, as I don't think that was the point, but you did an amazing job of getting me to read 6 paragraphs about a bilboard and house. The ending was also very cool/cute. I liked this alot, and am interusted in reading some more by you, I will try to in the future when I'm not so tired.
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]



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