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    dots Submission Name: SMW (A Not So Different Revision)dots
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    Author: screamALEX
    ASL Info:    19/M/PA
    Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 39/88/46
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 104
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    Bytes: 760



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    SMW (A Not So Different Revision)

    So, its been almost a year,
    since I wrote that first line.
    But I’ve gotta be honest honey,
    you still run through my mind.
    Cause every time I smell your perfume,
    I can’t help but hope it be you,
    but we both know that’d be too good to be true.
    Each time the phone rings is my new tragedy,
    Cause every time its not you is one more blow to me.
    Every word that I write seems to be about you,
    all these feelings melting onto paper,
    fabricating lackluster emotions with a dash of truth,
    that could make a holy man surrender.
    So, the next time you drive another boy blind,
    know that you still run through my mind.




    Submitted on 2007-03-03 17:16:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is really good you explain how you feel about this lady in such detail how you wish her to be back with you
    there was only one line that made me really feel this poem but there needn't be more as it was very powerful

    fabricating lackluster emotions with a dash of truth,

    it made me think and thats such a great thing for a poem to do weather its 10 lines or 1 as long as you have something in there thats captures the readers emotion and i feel that this did that good write and i hope my comment may be of some help to you becoming an elite writer :)

    rak
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]



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