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A Late Night Conversation

Author: Robert Neville
ASL Info:    16/m/London
Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10 /192 /232
Words: 142
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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A Late Night Conversation

A Late Night Conversation

A late night conversation
You two talk about anything
Even a little bit of flirtation
You sit up nearly the whole night
And you go to bed
At exactly the same time
And I’m left downstairs
Sobbing my eyes out
But I don’t mind
Because as long as your happy
I’ll keep my chin up
On the toilet seat

A late night conversation
A little bit of agitation
You don’t talk about anything anymore
You don’t sit up at all now
And you don’t even go to bed
At the same time
And you have the cheek
To come crawling back to me
But I’m still sobbing my eyes out
But they’re tears of happiness
Because I’m not a blubbering wreck anymore
And keep your chin
Before I knock your block off.

Submitted on 2007-03-03 17:20:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like the way you convey emotion and how you change from one meaning to the next in a new stanza. but the last two lines in each stanza i dont get. other than that though good write!
| Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
  I like punching people
| Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]

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