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    dots Submission Name: life Part Idots
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    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       rap thing i did when i was angry needed to channel some of it and i know its shit second part will be better


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    dotslife Part Idots
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    happiness is something you gotta find
    i got people telling me its all in my mind
    is this happiness well i cant find
    blud i cant see it am i blind

    i know dat we have problems
    cos were not perfect
    but we need some reason some kind of object

    an im seriously confused
    an i feel like this mind ive got is being misused
    cos theres this empty space
    that ain't filling up
    15 years of having bad luck
    it don't feel right
    don't matter how many prayers i recite
    i still feel fucked

    blud i see happiness every day
    but why and how did mine get taken away
    im always alone
    an i don't know why
    blud i hate goodbyes cos theres no replys
    that can end it good
    or make you feel the way you should

    happiness its leaking away
    like water in 3rd worlds countries that got taken away
    lifeless niggers stuck on the street
    and always asked why their acting this way

    god
    is he real
    does he know every thing and can feel
    is he sad can he see
    can he hear
    sometimes i wonder cos when im shouting he don't notice me

    life part ii to come hold tight the mosque the church waste mans on road
    dick heads in school politicians that run every thing my FAM




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