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life Part I

Author: dark figure
ASL Info:    17/m/uk
Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66 /74 /29
Words: 234
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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rap thing i did when i was angry needed to channel some of it and i know its shit second part will be better

life Part I

happiness is something you gotta find
i got people telling me its all in my mind
is this happiness well i cant find
blud i cant see it am i blind

i know dat we have problems
cos were not perfect
but we need some reason some kind of object

an im seriously confused
an i feel like this mind ive got is being misused
cos theres this empty space
that ain't filling up
15 years of having bad luck
it don't feel right
don't matter how many prayers i recite
i still feel fucked

blud i see happiness every day
but why and how did mine get taken away
im always alone
an i don't know why
blud i hate goodbyes cos theres no replys
that can end it good
or make you feel the way you should

happiness its leaking away
like water in 3rd worlds countries that got taken away
lifeless niggers stuck on the street
and always asked why their acting this way

is he real
does he know every thing and can feel
is he sad can he see
can he hear
sometimes i wonder cos when im shouting he don't notice me

life part ii to come hold tight the mosque the church waste mans on road
dick heads in school politicians that run every thing my FAM

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