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Please God!

Author: Black-Death
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Please God!

Please... God..
Dont forgive me for my sins..
Please God.
Let me kill again.
Let me take this knife.
And cut open your Creations.
Let me take this knife.
And slowly Slide it up and down there wrists. Lissing to the screams comming from there vains.
Lissing to the tears falling.
Let me cut them open.
Let me hear them beg.
Let me Make them Scream!
Please god!
Give me the strainght to take this blade And kill your creations

Submitted on 2007-03-03 18:57:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yes very dark and disturbing, but i like this...yes i kno it sounds weird and mabe even cruel (?) but i liked how one poem-one person, can show so much emotion. gued job there. *thumbs up*
| Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by darkwiccan14 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked how it showed the pain. I've felt the need to hurt others, but never myself. No one should hurt themselves. I feel it gives the world satisfaction. Like I've lost to the entire world, to all of society. And I'm a poor loser.
| Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by LadyDoragon | [ Reply to This ]
  Very dark, yet not disturbing. God can help, and only God can judge. I feel like this sometimes too. I just want to die, or kill, or hurt those who have hurt me, but at the end of the day, i guess we really only hurt ourselves. I like it.
| Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by blacknails | [ Reply to This ]

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