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    dots Submission Name: Salt-Rags and Tulipsdots
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    Author: all the english boys
    ASL Info:    15
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 173/239/46
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       won't you let me get you your heart's desires? why am i not your heart's desire? </3


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    i will bleed for you
    take this salt rag and caress your eyes
    blink for me, let a tidal wave of sleep
    fly down into my mind
    linger there

    i will kill for you
    take a rusty etching of your heart
    use it to saw away at the marrow
    of the side-starers, the woe-wishers
    those who don't love you like i do
    who don't do you right

    i will die for you
    let my meorial pave the way
    for my wake, you'll be the guest of honor
    i won't mind it underground
    the worms make better conversation
    sometimes

    i would rather live for you
    such fantasy as this was not made for true love
    sure i could fetch you tulips
    (their dew fresh in the early afternoon)
    but why you want me to leave your side
    makes me question your intents...




    Submitted on 2004-06-08 19:24:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i tend to think so too. about the worms' conversation, i mean. still can't get over how well you write for your age. such cynicism is astounding. bravo, again, baby Sappho!
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very good poem, i can relate i ones found someone like how you said i would die for, i love this poem, i can really relate to it
    | Posted on 2004-06-08 00:00:00 | by JGo | [ Reply to This ]
      very good poem indeed. I like it just the way it is except for the spelling error meorial i think should be memorial. Other than that your poem is flawless. I'm adding it to my favs and reading some more of your stuff...thanks for the great read
    | Posted on 2004-06-08 00:00:00 | by ares_nuke_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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