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Salt-Rags and Tulips

Author: all the english boys
ASL Info:    15
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Words: 147
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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won't you let me get you your heart's desires? why am i not your heart's desire? </3

Salt-Rags and Tulips

i will bleed for you
take this salt rag and caress your eyes
blink for me, let a tidal wave of sleep
fly down into my mind
linger there

i will kill for you
take a rusty etching of your heart
use it to saw away at the marrow
of the side-starers, the woe-wishers
those who don't love you like i do
who don't do you right

i will die for you
let my meorial pave the way
for my wake, you'll be the guest of honor
i won't mind it underground
the worms make better conversation

i would rather live for you
such fantasy as this was not made for true love
sure i could fetch you tulips
(their dew fresh in the early afternoon)
but why you want me to leave your side
makes me question your intents...

Submitted on 2004-06-08 19:24:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i tend to think so too. about the worms' conversation, i mean. still can't get over how well you write for your age. such cynicism is astounding. bravo, again, baby Sappho!
| Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a very good poem, i can relate i ones found someone like how you said i would die for, i love this poem, i can really relate to it
| Posted on 2004-06-08 00:00:00 | by JGo | [ Reply to This ]
  very good poem indeed. I like it just the way it is except for the spelling error meorial i think should be memorial. Other than that your poem is flawless. I'm adding it to my favs and reading some more of your stuff...thanks for the great read
| Posted on 2004-06-08 00:00:00 | by ares_nuke_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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