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I am you and you need me.


Author: Eagle
ASL Info:    20, M, Australia
Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 22 /48 /18
Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This is poetry. Don't believe me? Look deeper. Believe me? Look deeper still. Always, always look deeper...


I am you and you need me.



There's three things in this world, and I am one of them.

With me is you and with you is more you.
But then something comes along, a fourth and unwanted thing.
It gets between us, it hurts and it makes us realise that we're still alive.
It's something everyone needs, but more often then not, it lies dormant in the bad cases, and over active in the worst.
It's what makes us us really, in this world that revolves around me.

Yes, that's right, me.
Selfish?
Hardly.

If there was no me, there'd be no you.
If there was no me, there would be no birds, no trees, no smiles, no heartbeats.
Without me, there is nothing.

Look around and tell me what you see.
In fact, I'll tell you what to see.
That little piece of me that controls you, that IS you.
I am you and you are me but, without me, there is no you.

Take it how you want I guess...




Submitted on 2007-03-04 06:12:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thinking out loud and yes poetic. "Have I not said to you, you are gods?" jesus
I am that i am. If the earth revoles around you then you are the son/sun Christ conscious but the earth only revolves around the sun because we distinguish one fraction of matter frome the rest. The universe is made of the same basic elements as you and I so why can't we be the universe.
peace
| Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
  Very interesting, very. Yes, I would say it is poetry. When you express your thoughts in a form of writing, you could pretty much call it poetry. It doesn't have to rhyme.

This was very fun to read. It could be seen in a variety of ways. I took it as a loving couple: You find yourself in the other. Without you there is no him/her. Without them there is no you. You almost control eachothers every move in a way that makes life almost a game.

Although I doubt that is what you were thinking when you wrote this, that is one of the ways this made me feel and think. Great job, very interesting!
~Dan
| Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by djtswing | [ Reply to This ]


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