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    dots Submission Name: Depths of Souldots
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    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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       About me and a friend of mine.
    The despair of not being able to help the ones we care about.


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    dotsDepths of Souldots
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    And as it shattered,
    the well-painted image
    Of balance and strenght.
    I saw the scars of crimson
    On pale white skin
    and felt the notes
    of crying blues.

    She was the earth,
    spinning around my sun
    trusting faithfully
    Always there, for me
    To send my warmth

    I see her cold
    And not the same
    While rain raped colour
    Someone has stolen
    my earth away.

    Cry, and be unseen
    Shout, and be unheard
    Love, and feel more helpless.

    For where the scars of blues
    has shattered the glass
    the soul can lie too deep
    to be reached.







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    Submitted on 2007-03-04 07:17:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your Sole cries out your grief suspended between fate and the relentness past. Share hope and longing the future calls. Your universe will reach out and combine thar seems lost. Take heart. Regards.
    | Posted on 2013-10-05 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      "She was the earth,
    spinning around my sun
    trusting faithfully
    Always there, for me
    To send my warmth"

    You were lucky to have someone like this in your life...and you describe that feeling so beautifully.

    "I see her cold
    And not the same
    While rain raped colour
    Someone has stolen
    my earth away."

    There is nothing more tragic than watching the people we love be destroyed.


    And this...this most of all...this is beautiful...

    "Cry, and be unseen
    Shout, and be unheard
    Love, and feel more helpless."

    Thank you for sharing this with the community.


    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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