I think it would be better with "some of" ommited. The repetition between some of and sometime was so close together it seemed akward. Don't should be doesn't gramatically but you may wish to create a specific accent by leaving it. Either way the imagery is fairly meager the run rise beautiful breath taking and like the sunrise love is a difficult feeling to put into words. The most beautiful and necessary phrase is "That I am blessed to be
With you today" Simple and to the point; no sidestepping I like that.
peace
Aww, this is cute. I know exactly what you mean by this, and it's refreshing to see it applied in a platonic way. The 'dawn of purple' is a great image, it really pulls the poem together into a solitary thought and emotion. My only quibble is that, in the fourth line, 'don't' should be 'doesn't'. Or, you can change 'A tomorrow' to 'tomorrows'. My suggestion would just be to change 'don't', though, because tomorrows feels awkward. Keeps up the good work!
Submission Name: Blessed be the Moments
