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    dots Submission Name: Iíve Got A Problem dots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.3333
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    Iíve Got A Problem


    Iíve got a problem with Britainís Monarchy
    They lie and lie about killing Englandís rose
    Iíve got a problem with this abstract society
    Why is everyone at each others throats
    Iíve got a problem with, my fellow teenagers
    Why are they turning on, each other
    This is anarchy!

    Iíve got a problem with, people who lie
    Who do they think that they are impressing
    Iíve got a problem with every rich personís 15 bedroom home
    I wish they had to struggle to pay the rent
    I wish they knew what its like
    To not be able to,
    Live like they do

    Iíve got a problem
    Its green and blue
    Iíve got a problem
    And for once it isnít you

    Iíve got a problem with, people throwing up
    Sticking two fingers down their throats
    Iíve got a problem, stick-thin catwalk models
    Turn them sideways, and you can see right through them
    Burn them, and burn the flag
    Burn everyone, and serve your time in drag
    And call it
    Anarchy




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      I saw this on someone's favorite. I freaking love it!
    I agree with this so much...I want to help you kill those models and burn everything! It's amazing! I love this.
    No more to say, I just love it!

    --EbonyBlood

    P.S. -Added to Favorites.-
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by EbonyBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a good write, I really liked it. I too find the atrocities in this world disgusting. School shootings, starvation, people starving themselves on purpose just because it's today's norm. They don't have the courage to say, "This is me and I'm not changing to fit your corrupt standards." The rich get richer and the poor get poorer. And you're right, it's anarchy.
    It reminds me of that song by Everclear where he says:
    "I hate those people who love to tell you, 'Money is the root of all that kills.' They have never been poor they have never had the joy of a welfare Christmas."
    Meds make the world go round. They seem to have a pill for everything today, but it only causes more problems instead of fixing them. All in all, it's a good poem. It's refreshing to find works like this so keep writing.
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a problem with society too. Being extremely thin is so not sexy in anyway. Also I just cannot stand people with alot of money who complain about it!! They don't know about what is going on in the world!! So many people are starving all over the world have no way to get food!! But many girls starve themselves on purpose to look "hot." Their food should go to people who really want to be healthy.
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by bigothgurl | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very good write, but i was expecting more when I got to the end. maybe you could extend it, or just change the end so that it sounds like and end? otherwise, its great.
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      *sobs* u got a problem with models :'( *is sad* i'm a model :'( AND i'm not STICK THIN, so ha! lol i really liked this poem tho. It show's who u are and what you think of ur guys's establishment (if you'd call it) and i agree with the comment before! it's very powerful in words!!!
    ~*alexis*~
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by darkwiccan14 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that's a powerful poem and I really understood the message. I liked it a lot!
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by LadyDoragon | [ Reply to This ]


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