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~*bare*~


Author: darkwiccan14
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Class/Type: Joke /Comedy
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o.O noooo...ruunn!


~*bare*~



Flashing cameras everywhere,
Looking timid,
And kinda' scared.
Afraid to trip,
And afraid to fall,
Look out world!
Off to the mall!
Modeling off fashionable suits,
At affordable prices,
My,
Check out her boots!
Wouldn't I be more cute?
Walking down the catwalk,
Not scared,
Nor timid anymore,
But wait,
What is that-
no wait!
WHO is that!
Oh My God!'
Even though i'm not scared,
They should be,
Because no one wants to see that,
That person,
Bare....




Submitted on 2007-03-04 18:00:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  LOL I like comical poems they make me happy
| Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
  this is hilarious. so good. very true to the soul A+
| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]
  i agree with the comment by lukas. i know this happens to me too, but i feel that in poems we become slave to the rhyme and it limits what you can do with the poem. you ca have rhythem and flow without the rhyme.
| Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by kissmystars | [ Reply to This ]
  is the person naked? this poem makes you think. i like it. you just have the same problem that most of us do, that's flow. but don't worry, the majority of the poems i've read other then like, really famous ones in books n stuff lack the flow.
| Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by Lukas B | [ Reply to This ]


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