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    dots Submission Name: Oh'dots

    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 759
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    From Metamorphosis to Incognito
    the words have flowed through me
    like sand through the hourglass

    With suicide and pain in mind
    how easily have the thoughts come to life
    shaping, creating, possesing

    Would it be hard to believe that
    between each step taken
    each breath inhaled
    the memories have been engraved

    an endless supply of words
    an infinite amount of feeling

    time has passed and
    with each tick of the clock
    the flow of my words has worn out
    the thoughts in my head are missing pieces
    and my hope for humanity is almost gone

    on this journey that I have taken
    my feet have grown tired
    my ankles have swollen
    with the heavy burden I carry

    I lay down defeated after every attempt
    to renew my strenght and to express myself

    With a final word I leave you now
    an exclamation of surprise
    as I realize that my last breath
    has turned into a piece of work
    something I coveted for all of time

    Submitted on 2007-03-04 19:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm busy right now I will comment on it later. lol
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      i can't really put my thoughts into word because im still not certain about what it means but i still like it. its like you've lost your inspiration in a way but later found it. i might be wrong but i still like it a lot. what does it mean?
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]

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