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    dots Submission Name: A Month of Black Ice dots
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    Author: Guernica
    ASL Info:    17/male
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 77/114/67
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Month of Black Ice dots
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    A month of black ice,
    where everyone is seeing me as the antagonist
    and I'm up against towering odds,
    heavier than all the books I've read
    or all the hours I've spent sleeping.

    And I may just be visualizing things
    much harsher than they come,
    your envigorating smile, however tiny and concealed,
    whispers light to me from the end of a very long, impatient line
    from the end of torrents, rain and must,

    though it reaches me, reflected,
    shape shifting, shadow-eyed,
    I take you for someone who hates me
    and my being here,
    waiting.




    Submitted on 2007-03-04 21:00:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'd tell you what my favorite lines were, but then I think I'd end up writing the whole poem, so I won't. Good job! It's really sad, though, that people who "whisper light" get their light mistaken or twisted into darkness and hatred. We really cannot appreciate what other people mean- who they are and what they do get so easily twisted.
    -Vas
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by hey.you | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how your poetry integrates obvious feeling, while still remaining intelligent and appealing. I find that sometimes I write about nothing at all, just because I like stringing words together to form literal pictures that I appreciate. Another nice work.

    I hope in your next month the ice melts away and things become more bearable, and the like. Waiting is extremely difficult sometimes.
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]


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