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    dots Submission Name: Shindots
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    Author: Aken Sol
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 197/204/67
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsShindots
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    As her fingers reach out to touch mine
    I wonder
    Does she want my body or my heart?
    Maybe both?
    I ask for the money in advance

    She's not necessarily easy,
    Just lonely
    Like all the other girls who seek my...
    attention
    I can tell by looking in her eyes.

    I don't recall when I became a
    hollow shell
    People would keep taking parts of my
    heart and soul.
    No one tried giving anything back.

    It's not easy to gain acclimation
    to the cold
    To steal thier hearts before they steal mine
    Natural
    Her hands were warm as I played my role




    Submitted on 2007-03-05 03:42:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oo i like the image that everyone you encounter takes or steals a piece of yourself when they leave your company. its like a cruel game to see who takes more or takes our hearts first. after awhile it happens so much that we just become this viod and have no idea how we ended up there. good sht. i also like the last line a lot for some reason. cant tell u why but it wrapped it up for me well.
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]


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