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    dots Submission Name: sad girl.dots
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    Author: narcolepsy
    ASL Info:    19/F/Pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 129/135/60
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotssad girl.dots
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    the sad girl in
    the back of the bus
    with the sad music
    echoing
    in her sad girl ears
    she looks out the window
    sadly imagining she's
    a sad girl in a music video.




    Submitted on 2007-03-05 06:45:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely and most deftly done... poignant, sad and even sweet after a fashion... I liked it a ton and a half... bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      not sure if ive hit the mark on this one but to me it seems as if this girl is not trying to help her own depression. sad girl tells us that ya she's sad for whatever reason, there are plenty of reasons to be sad. then it continues on while listening to sad music added to it, with her sad ears while imagining that shes a sad girl in a video. makes me want to pull her ear phones out, shake her and say SMILE DAMMIT!
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]


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