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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    She wasn't a virgin,
    But she was pure in my eyes,
    I saw her with eyes of faith,
    That made her seem wise,
    We saw things the same,
    At a view, eye level,
    And she understood me,
    The way the streets and I rebel,
    Wilmington, Harrisburg,
    Pittsburg, Philly, Chester,
    Quiet as it's kept,
    Feelings would further fester,
    I knew she wasn't a virgin,
    But she was pure in my eyes,
    And if it happens to someone you know,
    It comes a surprise...




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