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    dots Submission Name: Herdots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 510
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    We both passed biology,
    Now were to have chemistry,
    Am I half a year behind,
    Or is she half ahead of me?
    See, I’m Amethyst the seventh
    She’s The Glass the twenty-third,
    I was scattered, she was in heaven,
    Before her thoughts were deferred,
    “See, I had words to say,
    But lost the words in the wood,
    I would delay it if I wanted,
    But I’d say it if I could”
    So against my better judgment,
    I became taciturn,
    Because every word said to me,
    Became an acid burn,
    Because she was mad at me,
    For everything, but how?
    I had too much time worry,
    And I still worry now,
    I worried here and there,
    For joy and hurt,
    And now that she’s gone,
    I just worry about…

    Submitted on 2007-03-05 09:33:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow.... i really loved this poem! it's soooo good! the ryhthym is amazing, and it flows perfectly.... i also loved you choice of words, and the emotion you put into it... Bravo!
    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      Explain this one to me later. I like it, because it flowed nice and it was actually really good, I just want to know why you wrote it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i love this ur stuff is pretty amazing... i dont get the first like half though... could you explain what it means?
    keep on writing you have a really amazing way with words.
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice really.... melancholy expressed in a unique and witty style.... Quite impressive.
    Liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]

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