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    dots Submission Name: The Celestial Sailor And The Tartdots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 656
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Celestial Sailor And The Tartdots

    Across pale stars I soar, a giant arc,
    And cover parsecs quicker than the eye
    Can blink, and here, again, within the sky,
    My masted ship like some celestial ark,
    For all the world looks like the Cutty Sark,
    Though it will sail to Venus by-and-by,
    Or past huge dust clouds icy cold and dry
    On to Algol where I will then debark.

    Iíll sail to silver moons washed pale with foam
    From methane oceans colder than my heart,
    Iíll mark the many-spired pleasure dome
    Where all my love was given to a tart
    Who bid me love her, take her to my home.
    I left, grew bored with all her artless art.

    Submitted on 2007-03-05 13:06:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is skilful write, definitely. There is no need to comment more on that part since I am nor skilful writer nor commenter.
    I would only say that the stanzas donít really fit. I mean, the emotion and tone are completely different.
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      It's hard to come up with something to make justice to this spectacular poetic endeavor. This is what dreams are made of. Truly, I could just stop to smell the flowers or knit a scarf of dream threads but sometimes...sometimes it's enough to read a poem such as this to feel that some things can come together as they should if you believe in the beauty of your dreams.
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a bit intrigueing, and while it fits the scheme of your writing, it is so different from the others in its theme....yes, it makes since, lovely mad sense....lovely
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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