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Author: misty_of_moon
ASL Info:    18/f/Right Here.
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Submitted on 2007-03-05 14:15:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm going to be under the assumption that the Avenging Angel is like a sister to the Angel of Death, except this one is in "heaven". It seems the most understandable in this case.

This seriously reminded me of St. Peter. Those who are not excepted into "heaven" are sent to "hell." If there is an afterlife, this is how I picture it. St. Peter is somewhat like a spokesperson for "God."

I have a few things that I want to whine about though, so please bear with me :).

Firstly, (and this only happened once) make sure that if you decide to capitialize "Avenging Angel", be sure to do it throughout the piece.

(That's my pickiness for the day).

Secondly, a wise friend told me that punctuation adds form and flow to a piece, and also makes it where you don't have to capitalize the beginning of every line. There are some continuation sentences between the lines, and they should be treated as such. Read the piece out loud, and try to see where the lines connect, and where there is a pause.

That is what really tore me from understanding this piece completely, but it seems as though you are giving your hypothesis on how people are sent to hell. You arrive at the pearly gates, St. Peter (the Avenging Angel) says "I'm sorry...*insert reason for rejection here*," takes out his scythe (or maybe [censored] sword, the scythe is the Grim Reaper's ALONE!!! It's true!) and sends *insert soul's name here* to "hell."

Thank you for writing this, and showing that the afterlife might not be a haven for some.

Have a good day,
Cirruculum (TK)
| Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Cirruculum | [ Reply to This ]
  oh wow is this peice about the angel of death?
do you really belive in the afterlife and such?
i liked this a lot. it was chilling to read about something as wonderful as life, being taken away by death. Its like all wishes, dreams, hopes comes to such an abrupt end
| Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by Inside Joke | [ Reply to This ]
  hey it's been a while!

anyways... i love how this was written and i'm an athiest as i'm sure you know, i can see how god had turned his back on the people here. i love how the angel could reprsent several things. to me i can see him as lucifer or satan on his decent to hell. also i could see him represent death himself with the whole sythe thing. after all they say death is just an angel of death. either way this was so well writen it's deff. a fav. thanks for the read.


p.s. where are all your poems :-( i wanted to read more!!!
| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by disturbedx1000 | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not sure what a nilhist is, but I think this poem is bad-ass. Hells yes M'n F'er this bia kicks honkey tonk badonkadonk. By the way, I hate that song. I got kinda confused. Is God the Avenging Angel? Either way it makes sense though. I'm at a loss for words as to describe how this poem makes me feel. Happy isn't strong enough. Eager would make me sound crazy. Maybe it's a mix of the adrenaline in my blood right now and the fact that I haven't smoked weed in a week that's making me feel most of this. either way it didn't really start till I read this poem. Great job. (clapping)

And weed for all!
| Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Magic Dragon | [ Reply to This ]

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