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    dots Submission Name: Apologiesdots
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    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 1033
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1235



    Description:
       This was written for a friend who will never see it. For too long I've been playing psychologist for him, and I can't take it any longer. So instead of flying off th handle at him, I wrote this.

    To Jason: I'm sorry I can't be more help.


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    dotsApologiesdots
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    Sunset, city line, silhouetted high rise
    I can get lost looking in my own eyes
    Don't know where I've been
    But now I'm gone

    You need me, you can't breathe
    Can't take this, I gotta leave
    Call me when you're sane again
    Time to say so long

    Helping you to make it through
    Breakin' down, you know it's true
    I know we've been the best of friends
    I can't do this anymore

    I feel confused, I've been so used
    You don't know how I've been abused
    This is where the chapter ends
    This isn't what I'm for

    I really tried by you denied
    And in the end you turned aside
    I'm done with all of this
    You're all alone

    I'm tied to the mast and she's sinking fast
    You had to realise this wouldn't last
    This whole thing's been hit or miss
    And I've hung up the phone

    I'm seeing blind, I'm so far behind
    Inside my head the gears won't grind
    I don't know where I've been
    But I'm gone




    Submitted on 2007-03-05 16:02:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow,
    I'm sorry. It's really hard to deny friends help but I guess it can happen. Some people can get sick of helping one another, sometimes it's not right but if you feel like you've done all you can then don't feel bad becuase at least you helped, right?

    This is a very nice write however. I liked it a lot. The emotion was deep and there and it flowed very well. Some word choice could help this and perhaps a little revamp on the meter. Other than that I wouldn't change a thing.

    Wonderful,
    Kyle B.
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]


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